Luca the Inkblot

A few things first. This story is completely random, composed of a drifting mind, something you should know. The prologue has nothing and everything to do with the plotline. Keep ...

It has potential, I'll give you that. You'll need to refine it, though, and keep yourself from telling instead of showing. Also all those numbers at the end? It messes ...

It was slightly confusing as to what the plot was about, what was happening in this chapter. It was a little unclear. You should make sure the reader knows all ...